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WALT describe a scene

WALT describe a scene as part of our narrative learning journey.

Describe this scene - ensure you use sparkling synonyms, similes (not too many!), extended sentences...

Make it interesting for the reader - be creative!

Don't forget to proofread your writing!

13 comments:

  1. TeanaApril 4, 2011 at 2:48 PM

    In the middle of a dark gloomy forest there was two Ogers that lived in a small but adventurous house! The house had grass growing everywhere around it but considering there house was made out of a tree it was quite nice to live in! Inside it dazzled as it was warm and cozy! Shrek lived inside the house with his wife,donkey and pussy cat who already knows its self defense! Outside the house there was a washing line that was made from a branch! Since they were Ogers they didn't really care if there was a spider crawling up the wall they would just smack it then eat it! It was a wonderful house if you really knew a Ogers life! By Teana

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  2. Mrs AmosApril 4, 2011 at 4:30 PM

    "Inside it dazzled as it was warm and cozy!" This is my favorite sentence Teana, I love how you have used a sparkling synonym!. Well done

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  3. AnonymousApril 4, 2011 at 8:53 PM

    cool

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  4. AnonymousApril 4, 2011 at 8:55 PM

    awesome as work teana i love it it is the best writing i have ever heard in my life!!!

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  5. TennilleApril 5, 2011 at 2:22 PM

    In the middle of a dark lonely forest there was two ugly green Ogers that had no yummy yummy food so they had to hunt for their food. One of the ogers names were Sherk. This Oger does not care if any thing and i mean anything crawled on him he would not even care he will just eat it. It is a wonderful cottage when you think of it. by Tennille

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  6. Te HuiaApril 5, 2011 at 2:23 PM

    in the big gloomy woods two Ogers lived in a big lonely house. this house has grass growing in and out of the cracks.this ugly little cottage was very cozy for the Ogers mind u for an Oger a big gross but lovely swamp is there .. being an Oger would be much fun!! ..... created bye Huia

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  7. AnonymousApril 5, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    in the middle of a really black forest there lived two ogers that lived in a nice and cozy but disgusting tree stump they had 6 baby ogers shrek had a wife called fiona and she was a gorgus princess that was locked in a huge tower she was turned in to a oger that lite shreks eyes up she was beautiful,stunning and to me rapunzel shrek got married his best man(best donkey) was called donkey.donkey was a ugly and pretty annoying.donkey was turned in to a horse a beautiful cream white horse.well..back to shrek and fiona they were the best not so great tasting people but they have got yucky taste buds but hey were a cool couple.And they live happly ever after!!!!


    THE END!!!

    By Britney Ryan : )

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  8. NicholasApril 5, 2011 at 2:27 PM

    I the middle of the scary dark forest there lived an ogre named Shrek.
    His house was made from an old fallen down tree inside there were ogre ear wax candles and snail soup. It was as warm as the sun inside and the wood of the walls was rotting away. Outside the grass was as green as Shrek's skin and as tall as Shrek's friend donkey plus there was mould covering the whole house.

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  9. amiApril 5, 2011 at 2:28 PM

    In the creepy dark forest there lived two ogers that hunt for food
    because there poor and there names is sherk and greedy

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  10. callumApril 5, 2011 at 2:28 PM

    Shreks Swamp

    Shreks swamp is in the middle of a deserted forest with dark looming trees. In the swamp is a small broken-down hut made of an old beach tree stump.Shrek lives in this hut with fiona , the three babies and donky.To shrek this little hut is the best house ever,all he does all day is relax in mud bathes.The only thing he doesnt like is nobodys scared of him!

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  11. danika & MadiApril 5, 2011 at 2:48 PM

    Two Ogers living in a adventurous house with grass growing like wild fire in a dark crispy forest.The two ogers live happy like thay wonted to be in there live and having two much fun at all.

    By Madi & Danika

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  12. shaun and ethanApril 5, 2011 at 2:53 PM

    shreks house looks like tree pulled up out of the ground and built
    round the roots to make a proper house.the chimny is the trunk
    of the tree shornt

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  13. triniyApril 5, 2011 at 2:53 PM

    Deep deep in the swomp there was a little house but in that house lived a big big big oger same peple say he looked very ugly, .He had a very funny dokey or as shrek says a very bad singer. the house had a big like a big tree sump same times when nobody is looking sherk a his wife take a big mud bath and puss in boots will him and dokey don't get alole here will. By trinity

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